Friends Make You a Better Person
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What kids need to know is that friends will be there for you when you need it, they do a lot of nice things. Friends make you a better person: they help you in school work, they say encouraging things and they let you be you. They are always waiting to help.
One reason that friends make you a better person is by helping you in school work. For instance friends help you in school work when you make a mistake and they help you correct it. Also friends help you in school work when the teacher isn’t around to help. In addition to friends make you a better person by helping you in school work, I remember when we were doing something in class and I didn’t get it so my friend showed me an easy way to understand it. Thats why friends help you understand school work.
Another reason that friends make you a better person is by saying encouraging things. For example I remember when it was a play and I was sooo nervous, but my friend said “Break a leg” (good luck) I felt a lot better thats why friends make you a better person by saying encouraging things. Another example, I remember the day after my parents told me that they were going to get a divorce, I was so down and I felt like nothing would be happy again … but my friends made me happy by telling me it would be ok and giving me hugs. Thats why they say encouraging things. One time I remember when my friend was teaching me how to do the monkey bars and I was about to go and she was saying: “You can do it!” I did it with ease. Thats one more reason they say encouraging things.
Last reason that Friends make you a better person is by letting you be you. One example that shows this is one time I was being really goofy and my friends were actually liking it, and they weren’t saying mean things and they were saying nice things! Thats a way of letting you be you. In addition I remember when I told my friends about a problem I had when I was little, and I thought that they wouldn’t enjoy me because I kind of still had it, but they enjoyed the way I was. Thats how they let you be you. One time me and my friends were making a game about dragons and fairies, and they weren’t forcing me to be somebody I didn’t want to be, they let me choose Thats why friends make you a better person by letting you be you.
I realize that when I make my friends better people I feel good about having them with me. So when other kids do it too they may not notice it, but they are doing something wonderful and helpful to them and their friends.
Great evidence and a good variety in your transition phrases!
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This is so true. Friends are so important to all parts of growing and living. I am so proud of you. -- Ms. Nelson
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ReplyDeleteGreat job! I like how you give many examples of your friends helping you and making things better. You are a good writer.
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